For a while now, Mr Walker has been teaching us a new skill we could use in our writing. It is called 'Show, don't tell'. You may be wondering what it means. 'Show, don't tell' is all about showing people what you are thinking, not telling them. At first, I was really puzzled. How can you show something to your audience through a book? I thought. Well, here are some of the examples. Try to differ them. You can write in the 'comment's' section one of your OWN examples:
1. It was raining outside.
1. The rain was pounding heavily on the concrete, producing a monstrous sound, while the wind howled wildly.
2. He was so cold outside.
2. There he stood, shaking like a little leaf. His face started turning blue, his lips where replaced with white, thin lines, and his knees started to shake as if he was cornered by a big bully. Man, I wish he would just come out of the rain, but it seems that his feet have been glued to the concrete.......
Hello Renitta,
ReplyDeleteThat was an AWESOME post! I enjoyed reading it. My teacher has not spoken about it yet, but he said he will teach us about it later on this year. When I grow up, I want to be an author, so this kind of skill will be really useful.....
Is this one of the 'Show, don't tell' sentences?
Ice cream:
There it stood, looking like an iced angel. It ripples of chocolate goodness shining in the hot, blazing sun. I just wish I could eat it!
Melanie, Andrea, and Andre :)
PS: Love your posts!:)
Hello, Melanie, Andrea, and Andre,
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for reading my post and commenting on it. I can see that you enjoyed it.
I am guessing that it might be one of the 'Show, don't tell' phrases. I am not quite sure. I'll find out from my teacher. But, anyhow, I still think that is a great sentence to put in a narrative. Great Job!
Thank you once again.
Renitta
Henderson North School :)